When I went to my cousin’s birthday party with my parents and my sisters, I went to Gregg and said, “HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!” He is eighteen years old. Then I went to Gregg’s sister my other cousin, and my sisters and I were playing on her trampoline. We were playing a fun game and it was called ball tiggy on the trampoline. My other cousin, Gregg’s sister got tug.
We went inside the house and ate taro, ham, chicken nuggets, chicken that’s sliced, we had those stuff that had chicken and yum stuff inside it and it was lite brown on the outside and we had sauce to put the chicken nuggets and the chicken on the sauce too. We finish eating and the food tasted NICE!!! After we ate we were watching TV and the movie was called LOVE WRECKED.
Then we went outside again and we saw the sky tower from their house. Then we were talking about the people who dance. Then we went back inside and watched LOVE WRECKED until LOVE RECKED was finished and it said THE END.
After that the BIRTHDAY PARTY was over and my parents and my sisters went inside the car and we said bye because we went back home.
Hi Zion,
ReplyDeleteGreat to see you keeping up writing. It sounded like you had lots of fun at your cousin's birthday. Do you think you could try and change some of your sentence beginnings to make them more varied. You have used then too many times.